Crawled Inside
You crawled up my sleeping nose
or down an exposed ear at night,
where the duvet wasn’t tucked in
right. Or you sneaked stealthy with
a blink and a loose eyelash,
only a small irritation, to start with.
Only a little niggle, a little tickle in
the sinuses, a mumble in the gums
that might mean oncoming toothache.
But might not. Might not. Yet.
You settle in, comfy, kick off your
shoes, make yourself at home,
crack a beer. You channel-surf my
brain, play me at memory games,
scoring points. You turn on
my tear ducts in the street and make
my nose bleed unexpectedly at work.
Sometimes you go easy for a while:
just a tension headache, just a poke
in the back of the eye
like a knitting needle. Other days
it’s migraine-electric shocks. And
digging up the deepest burial grounds
with a sharpened spade, grubbing up
the rotting sickened things best left.
You give me special new gifts too.
Dropping them in with knives and spit,
you switch on the cement mixer.
Those days you are a tumour.
Oh my, this one will take some thinking about, re-reading, thinking about some more …
I guess it’s one that can be read in a number of different ways and will mean different things to different people. It came from the idea of personifying an unpleasant set of feelings and grew from there.
Dag! What bile! I love it!!!
Thanks Pete – you know bile is one of my special skills…
Love the vitriol in this. Sounds like someone I used to date!
Oooh dear – glad it’s “used to” rather than currently Kate! Thanks for reading.
Whoa — just reading the tags makes my flesh crawl.
Powerful and creepy.
Well done!
Thanks Jim.
‘…grubbing up
the rotting sickened things best left…’ can’t get a lot more yeuky than that.
The whole poem is genius, Holly.
The term ‘like’ doesn’t come into it because it can be read on so many different levels – and is truly gruesome on as many of them as I can see.
I think what you say is right, it will mean different things to different people, appeal to different people in different ways.
Love the comments you have above re bile and vitriol, and the one from Jim who says ‘just reading the tags’ makes his flesh crawl
Yeah, the tags are an interesting one. I try to tag on elements of the poem, possible themes and “abouts”, but I don’t want to be telling anyone exactly *how* they should be reading the thing. So is always a compromise between hitting the search engines and being too over-explanatory. I’m still learning…
Really good again.
I had no idea that we had so many mutual acquaintances in Fergus,Heather W, Jenny H,Ruth S, Suz, Bobby, Ian W , Catherine C and RBC.
“42″ perhaps?
can’t wait to see you perform live.
T’is a small world sometimes, eh? Funnily enough “42″ is the only place I’ve “performed” as yet – scared me silly, but it’s a challenge I want to conquer to get better at presenting these things in person. I often think there are poems that are written for the page and poems that are written to be heard… I’ve always felt I write better for the page, but I’m open to dipping my toe in the water of performing… if terrified!
Very frightening , sounds like it is written with some knowledge..not personal I pray! Brilliant as ever Holly!
Thank you – it’s certainly a sinister ones!